Tuesday, December 25, 2007

let us redo your day
and
make night seem our again;

(- let us redo your day ….)

when air in its subtle coldness
smells the querulous play -
on a day bereft of sun
bathes in clouded rain ...

often found you looking through
pale winds caressing the flowers
breathing wry paints on window sills (and)
making little boxes of yellow dreams ....

(- let us make our night again ....)

when on incongruous pathways
where through leaves in the woods
lay the pebbles that you picked -
realigning your fragile senses ...

(- and )

as I hold on to few drops of your smile
between fingers of my closed palm
holding the stirring chirps in the sky
of countless birds flying away ....

- I await your consent to fly today …

let us begin by redoing your day
and
making the night seem our again ;

14 comments:

mystic rose said...

floored! totally... :)

kalai said...

"as I hold on to few drops of your smile
between fingers of my closed palm"

had a very different feel.. excellent.. take care Alok... enjoy...

Priya said...

Lovely Alok. By redoing things close to heart can make it bright and beautiful.

Jeevan said...

dreams today for our future. nice work alok.

Annie Wicking said...

Wow, How beautiful, Alok.

Peace and love to you. my dear friend.

Best wishes

Annie

aria said...

"let us begin by redoing your day
and
making the night seem our again "
Great! Palpable emotions .. redoing days .. I too wish it is possible ..

floots said...

there is a wonderful mixture of regret and tranqulity of spirit in this one alok
thank you

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

this is my kind of poem! wonderful!

annie said...

So u good at both eh – number crunching and word munching!

gP said...

in a strange way...i feel warm...realizing that i might have a friend or a lover in another reality when i read this.

Alok said...

Mystic Rose: thank u mam :)

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Kalai: thank u .. different feel to ?? :)

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Priya: So true ... bang on ... thank u

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Jeevan: So well said ... beautifully said ...thank u

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Annie Wicking and Loman Austen: thank u my friend

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Aria: Palpable emotions ... sighs! redoing days ... well if u honestly ask me it is just a try away ... what say

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floots: thank u as always

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Andrew: many thank u sir :)

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Annie: ur comment put a smile on my face :) thank u

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Siva [Ghost Particle]: So sweet ... friend in understood but lover ... mate u sure :) thank u


Thank u guys for ur time. truly appreciated

Alok

Nitwit said...

The best thing that the day would be repeated in the same fashion... rekindling the hope for betterment

kalai said...

different feel.... ya.. i felt like i was holding few drops of smile (of my friends,...) ur smile too is very good.... keep smiling dear friend...

Alok said...

Nitin and Kalai ... thanks for ur words buddies ...


Alok