he looks over the paling fence
of my mind and heart
searching where I live by;
looking across the grassy yards
breaks my inner most thoughts
into boxes of several placid cards;
and through several graffiti miles
the effulgent rays penetrates
and rocks upon the rocking chair
lying beside my veranda’s despair;
it’s not the same today
it’s not the same
it’s some other sun
that has found its way.
13 comments:
wonder what happened to it? and why? :)
'several graffiti miles' - I love that phrase Alok - what a way to describe what the sun's rays cover - awesome metaphor.
I like how the sun had so much meaning and finally broke through the 'fence of your mind and heart'
Excellent yet again Alok
"he looks over the paling fence
of my mind and heart
searching where I live by"
really when i started, i thought dat 'he' is related to some person/animal. sorry 4 dat. but when i finished ur post, i wondered u related very nicely to sun... nice one... tc friend...
I need some SUNNY days in my life...send it my way Alok :)
Keshi.
Oh how the sun can make us smile... Alok, this is sweet.. almost bittersweet.
tara
that's such an interesting ending. I really like it.
//it’s some other sun
that has found its way//
indeed.. may your "sun" find its way
yes
the sun can intrude as well as illuminate
nicely done
thank you
Sun's rays are not same at everyday, the shades bring every different views.
Its warms!
Let the rays shine on you Alok.
Mystic Rose: It just wanted to be my guest ... and he was so welcome :) thnk u
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Janice Thomson: Words here fail in expressing gratitude ... thanks a ton ...
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Kalai: As I have oft said ... interpretation of poetry is on readers ... even if u wld have read it otherwise ... I would have drawn immense satisfaction in the fact that u were able to relate to it ... thanks as always
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Keshi: Here it goes ... I have thrown it ur away ... At Jet's speed it will take around an hour and a half and there u see ... and the smile ... Did it reach u :) thanks matey
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Tara [Inside our hands, outside our hearts] wht else one wants beside a smile ... keep smiling ... and as once u had said "soft love"
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Andrew: thank u sir for ur kindness ....
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Deepa: And wish u the same as well buddy ... thnk u
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Floots: lets roll the blinds for the intruder .... (Oh I love to do tht and fail to understand why weekdays are longer than weekends :)My thanks as always
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Jeevan: Warmth ur way too my friend ... thank u
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Pria: And let it shine in ur life too .. thank u
Thanks u guys as always .. Appreciated
Alok
it’s some other sun
that has found its way
indeed most of the times its some other sun that has found its way isn't it
Ronak: You wouldnt know how much I agree wid ya ... thanks for ur thoughts
Alok
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