Sunday, July 29, 2007

Dawn ......

His physical organic structure was still asleep but lay like a carcass. The ravens had not dared to come close to him though they were there in sight far off. He woke up in a disquieted state perplexed by the sudden rush of anxiety running through his veins. He could still feel himself running on wet grass, miles without tiring but with sweats of fear clearly dropping on his creased forehead. He could feel the sun coming out from a distance and he wanted to leap across the barbed fence to reach it like a phoenix for its ultimate glory. He could still feel the grass, the wet soil and the rain. He got up like a sudden storm without any purpose. His heart was running at 110 beats. He sat quiet for a moment. It was still dark outside.

He reached for the bed lamp. The uncomfortableness of the obscured artificial light made him switch it off again. The sky by now had started to transform itself into a murkish blue and he could feel himself relaxed for a moment. He got up, still in his shorts. He searched for the packet of cigarettes that he did not remember where he had last kept the night before. He finally managed to find it on the book shelf in the far corner of the room.

Sam lighted his cigarette with one stroke of an efficient hand that required no training, and stood in his old balcony looking blankly at the sky. The sky was a distinct blue now. Light like a parasite had started spreading uncontrollably. It’s just that all parasites do not come with vices, he thought. Trees upon trees were now visible over the mountain peak that he could see from his balcony. He was midway through his cigarette. He waited patiently as the buildings across the city started showing up. There was still a serene calmness surrounding the air. He could still feel the wet air. Perhaps it had rained the night before. He could now see the wet grass with dews bundled on each strip waiting for the winds to blow them away. It indeed had rained the night before.

He could see the sun peep a little over the mountains. There now was a tinkle of golden tinge across the horizon celebrating their liberation from the black cloaked frosty night. Slowly it gained a trenchant orange texture and then scattered across the sky-line like fire. The day had begun ……….. Sam felt relieved ...... he could feel blood running through his arteries again as he lighted another cigarette .......

…………… dawn had finally arrived to cover up his scars of the night.

12 comments:

Annie Wicking said...

Wonderful, I enjoy reading your piece.
Is it part of a book and have you had anything published?

Best wishes

Annie

Anonymous said...

Hmm I see you related yourselves here pretty well. Don't u?

Good writeup.

Inside our hands, outside our hearts said...

A nice write .... I love this line

" dawn had finally arrived to cover up his scars of the night"

So true...

Mónica said...

Hi, I'm from Uruguay.
I hope you visit me.
My blog has a button to translate spanish to english.
I'll see you.

Kiss to you.

KAYLEE said...

nice work here I love this part too
"" dawn had finally arrived to cover up his scars of the night"

how are you today?

Keshi said...

wow wow wow! U r a GREAT writer Alok!

Dawn...Alok..Light :)

Keshi.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I agree with "inside our hands" above. Wonderful.

Rai said...

You have a wonderful power of observation. Do write a novel someday ...that's if you haven't already :-)

keep writing!

laughingwolf said...

good morning, buddy [here in nova scotia, anyway]

nicely wrought piece, but then, you never disappoint

aria said...

A picturesque description & some wonderful lines there .. :)

Alok said...

Annie, thanx! the piece is not part of a book (I haven't written any ... these r just short musings) n haven't anything published .... you have been very kind ... ty

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Pria, thanx ... you felt so ... no that's not me ... that's sam u c

okie okie ... i will accept there were parts of me but only just:)

ty

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inside our hands, outside our hearts ... thanx mate ...

have a good day

ty

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monica i went to ur site ... but there was a problem ... i don't understand spanish and the english translation was really poor by the site that provides the feed

but i m sure by the feel of ur site, u enjoy wht u r doing .... keep it up

ty

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Kalyee ... thanx girl! how r u feeling today .... read ur post ... wasnt very encouraging ... u take care

ty

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Keshi ..... thanx ... u knew wht alok meant .... i m so glad ... i was so excited to read that....

ty

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andrew ... thanx so much ... i absolutely have fallen in love with ur last post

ty
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rai ... thanx so much .... i enjoy ur writings even more ...

ty
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laughing wolf good morning to u as I m ready to hit the bed :)

thanx buddy and have a nice day ahead of u

ty

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aria .... thank u so much ..... thanx for reading

ty

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take care guys

appreciated

alok

Nimmy said...

wonderful, again! you leave me speechless. all i have to give you are exclamation marks!! ;)
nimmy :)