Tuesday, January 8, 2008

was she bothered
engrossed in her mind
thoughts … thoughts
unlike flowing breeze
(whose heart could smell
of fragrant silence)
thick hard shells -
rock hard -
shell hard -
like a gaze fixed
(instinctive twilight
administering - - -
crimson heights)
whose moving body
sets afire
fire burns fire
or is it -
she was just too bothered
when nobody else bothered
(whose rose would smell
still distinct
distinct - - - -
as roses always would always believe)

12 comments:

Priya said...

she was just too bothered
when nobody else bothered

I like that she who never cares of anything..

gP said...

a love story? :)

aria said...

"whose rose would smell
still distinct
distinct - - - -
as roses would always believe"

hmm .. roses wither away .. perhaps they forget that too ..

Dave said...

"thoughts
unlike flowing breeze...


A simile I can appreciate... :-)

floots said...

i can't get enough of roses be they real
or symbolic
nice one

Keshi said...

roses wither away but the fragrance remains in the memory.

Keshi.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

this one is powerful. my favorite line is the one that Priya quoted.

Janice Thomson said...

I like this - it has the feel of a soul grounded deeply in nature no matter the circumstance.

Alok said...

have been a tad busy with wordly duties... will get to ur comments shortly (hopefully tom :))


U guys have fun in the meanwhile


Alok

Jeevan said...

Feeling her memories bring backs the lease fragrance at moment it breeze.

venuss66 said...

This one is very deep my fren. Beautiful and meaningful. Take care fren.

Alok said...

Thank you everyone for dropping by .. truly appreciated ...

Take care


Alok