Jointer that holds the wooden table
In a living room so naturally -
Empty a while before, whoever noticed
I still await;
- Forgetful …
- Extremely forgetful …
Spring that’s known to rear a life
In a garden so naturally -
Shivering in cold winds
I still await;
- Forgetful …
- Extremely forgetful ….
A beginning too has a loose end
For a new beginning so naturally -
On a curled dirt mountain road
I still await;
- Forgetful …
- Extremely forgetful ….
I saw the wind travel, northward perhaps
Carrying a sealed letter pale and empty -
Sunny yellow window panes
I still await;
- Forgetful …
- Extremely forgetful ….
10 comments:
extremely beautiful! I cud almost picture all that..I love the last bit with sunny yellow window panes....
yet something so sad abt this verse...a yearning that was never reached?
Keshi.
'A beginning too has a loose end...'
will stay with me all day. Thought provoking verse. My poetry blog is Gilded Mask.
A neat structure for this piece.
The imagery was beautifully tinged with melancholy. Like Julie the line 'A beginning too has a loose end' captured my attention too. Well done Alok!
this is a simply lovely poignant poem...so evocative...Wish U a Happy Holi. May this Holi brings a lot of joy and happiness in our life & Wish that your life becomes colorful as the colors of Holi..
I am a bit too busy with my work now, which will continue, so couldn't visit your blog for sometime...anyway, I will check your other posts later whenever I will get the break.
extremely forgetful - how true....
Simple things captured beautifully in this verse. You are good in observing as always alok.
Keshi: Thanx mate for the effusive praise ... I wrote this piece in a fit of anger ... perhaps yes becoz of a yearning thts never reached .. hopefully someday :)
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Julie: Welcome and thank u ... u know what else can give me more pleasure than a line that will remain with someone ... do visit often :)
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Janice: Thank you .. as I told Keshi, I wrote this in a fit of rage .. and actually posted it all aligned as left ..then when I came back to this piece I somehow realised how silly I have been .. and since I didnt want to take it off .. so just aligned it a little bit to ensure readability :) thank u as always
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Kalyan: Thank u and no issues .. work always comes first :) take ur time ...
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Andrew: Your comment had a smile on my face ... thank u
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Jeevan: My thanks as always my friend ... I loved ur comment
Thank you guys, truly appreciated
Alok
Its a kind of verse in which one hears a 'voice' .. apart from it being so visual and evocative ..
" I saw the wind travel, northward perhaps
Carrying a sealed letter pale and empty -
Sunny yellow window panes"
I liked this very much :-D
Aria: Your comment is so heartfelt ... wht more can encourage one ... thanks a ton ..
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Miladysa: Thank u so much .. hope u had a gr8 vacation
Alok
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