Tuesday, December 11, 2007

When I thought about you last night -

or was it more like a dream
like beads of rain drops
caressing the moon
in a luminous muse;

You walked across the room -

like frail clouds treading
carefully the rasorial path
for awaited on the other end were
season’s chasm of monsoon skies;

You sat beside me holding my gaze -

like ribbons of moiré
over several gnome ambitions
sewed together
in a singular pattern;

Now that you have come -

stay with me and my times
like
deserts' desire
of -
their oasis dreams
.

13 comments:

Priya said...

It was just romantic Alok.

beads of rain drops
caressing the moon
in a luminous muse
- Loved these lines.

Janice Thomson said...

What a unique allegoric ending Alok - a very passionate love poem. Wonderful!

kalai said...

"You sat beside me holding my gaze"

"Now that you have come - stay with me and my times"

lovely one Alok... dats really a nice feel...is dat true or just a fiction??? take care friend...

Keshi said...

wow nice one Alok!

Somehow my sulky mood today clashes with this lovely poem :)

Keshi.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I like everything about this- the subject, how you put it together and how you said it. Great work!

mystic rose said...

a fitting ode to your muse.. :), she's been doing a wonderful job.

Jeevan said...

A soft and gentle touch to feel in the lines buddy. Beautiful poem :)

Alok said...

Priya: Ohh! romance is wht keeps the zest alive .. for love, for people, for passions, for life .... thank u as always

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Janice: thanks as always my friend ... that last para was a sort of experiment .. am so glad u liked it

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Kalai: buddy it's all a function of fiction :) I am such a boring guy that if I write about facts that people will end up despaired :) thanks a ton :)

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Keshi: I now know what u mean ... Tom is always a new day ... and I am ceratin few drinks would have surely helped .. cheers :) thanks ya

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Andrew: I now run a risk of overrating myself (okie okie ... I hold my balance :))... thanks so much for that

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Mystic Rose: ha ha thanks so much mam ... I hope it dosen't desert me :)

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Jeevan: thanks u buddy as always ...

Thanks u guys .. really appreciated

Alok

kalai said...

Who said dat u r a boring guy??? no.. u r not. u r so sweet friend. iam really happy 4 getting u as my friend... ur thoughts r wonderful (above dat)... take care buddy...

venuss66 said...

Wow! It's so romantic. beautiful love poem.
Merry Christmas to you and all.

PS: Posted a few poems from my old collections.

floots said...

oasis dreams - wonderful
thank you

Ronak said...

Tumse mili thi jo zindagi,
Humne abhi boee nahi...
Tere seeva koi na tha,
Tera seeva koi nahi....

By Gulzar

Now that you have come -
stay with me and my times
like deserts' desire
of - their oasis dreams.

What a way to express eternity ....

That is BRILLIANT !!!

You are the gifted one...

Alok said...

Venus: thank u my friend .. i loved them all ... thanx again

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Floots: Thank u so much

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Ronak: Long time ... I enjoy ur visits immensely ... U r more kind to me than I harbor the beliefs ... thank u as always (those verses by Gulzar is so amazing ....)


Thanks Guys

Alok