what You reckon -
(is needless deeds)
what I bear upon -
(is only my creed)
the stag that ran -
(for life succeeds)
the Lion that hunted -
(balances decreed);
or what You say - one day
exchange these places
You and me
Me and naught
or in other forms
some stimulus
when I look upon (and)
you look above
13 comments:
structure wise and rhyme wise, this is one of ur best works as yet...
:)
a never ending relation between you and your motivation. life is a race, between us and our thoughts.
p/s: Finally i got the geist on why you don't tittle your poems, you are not confined to expectations of the title. am I right bro? :p
You seem to have been changing your forms of poetry lately. I like it.
ur poems r improving a lot... hw can u say dat u r a boring character? see... hw many stuffs r hiding in u... keep going...take care Alok...
Inspirit in the your lines... nice flow!
lovely words....the flow is just wonderful....very nice & Here's Wishing you a Merry Christmas & a Wonderful New Year. May the New Year bring lots of joy, happiness & prosperity in your life & your loved ones.
this is genius! lovely.
Excellent Alok - we take turns at being either the hunter or the hunted - what is up for you could be down for me - it is always a matter of perspective.
Alok, constant battle... we all have them... but your new style... seems cryptic... sort of like a puzzle for us to figure out. I am usually fond of simplicity, yet I do enjoy this new style of yours.
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MM: thank u buddy ... humbled
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Siva [Ghost Particle]: bro thanx a ton ... what can I say to such an eloquent comment ... thanx again ...
And as regards to the title ... yes true ... any poem should not be bound into the confines of their titles ... titles tend to act as guides and give direction but then that is restricting the imagination from running into possibilities (I hardly read a title before starting a piece ... I somehow manage to avoid them) ... the reader starts reading the writer's mind and not what the words speak to them .... poetry has got no meaning if it doesnt speak your language .... who cares about what the writer wanted to say ... all it matters is how you interpreted it ... did i make any sense ???
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Andrew: Honestly speaking I am constantly trying to seek the best medium through which I can communicate ... If I bind myself to a particular form I guess the expressions would no longer speak the same language ... Moreover by nature I have a tendency to be unpredictable ... I like being unpredictable ... so it is again an endeavor in this regard ... thank u much
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Kalai: I am honoured that you would think that way ... though I remain the boring guy that I was ... not much improvement on that front :) thanks as always
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Kalyan: It is always a pleasure to see you around ... u speak with such simplicity in ur comments that marks ur heart and makes me see the person that you are though I have never seen you ... Merry Christmas matey ... and wishing you a very happy new year ... enjoy and thanks
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Vesper: thank u immensely for that extremely kind comment ... just put a sprint in my mind when I read that ... thanks again
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Janice: you read me so well :) I can no longer be unpredictable ... u know u said exactly the same thing that formed the premise for this poem ... I am honoured always by ur visits ... thank u so much
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Tara [Inside our hands, outside our hearts]: as I said to Siva in my comments above .. it doesnt matter what the writer is saying but if you could relate to any piece in your own way ... if it could touch u in ur way ... what more should a writer ask for .... irrespective of the form, art or words one thing that I am very sure when I write or read or see ... I all of them from my own personal experiences and perspectives .... I try to see how can I relate to this ... how has it affected me .... what it has in it for me ... and somehow every word that I have read or picture that I have seen has something there in it for me ..... that's what I carry with me ..... thank u as always
Thank you guys for dropping by .. Tomorrow is Christmas eve and you all would be busy with Christmas celebrations ... Here wishing you happy holidays and if you are a Christian ...Blessed Christmas ... Take care all ... enjoy the festivities and ... and thats it
Alok
yes you did bro...tru to the sense that among a million poems, only a handful will move you.
Interesting, perhaps suggesting that order is derived from God?
Siva [Ghost Particle]: How well I can identify with what u wrote .. thanks for that
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Manimala: yes true .. I left enough hints for that :) thanks as always
Alok
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