her smiled deceived
dismissive indeed
bashful and conceited
when she didn’t see;
tacit ... enterprising ....
courageous nonetheless
touch me nay
she says always;
lest her shyness succeed
hidden from treasures I see
she turns helpless
her distance beyond my reach;
by mere design
awkward indeed
vigorous with life (when)
sees no one in sight ….
12 comments:
Those are the feelings of tiny butterflies when you come across such emotions.
It just amazes me this one.. somehow it hits hard at home the desolation row where I live.
but at least I;m in dubious battle no more...
wow!
Keshi.
I know this woman. :)
double strong it was!! very nice :)
tacit ... enterprising ....
courageous nonetheless
touch me nay
she says always
well said, one must be prudent enough to weigh the curcustances , read between the lines, and deicide on the true meaning without asking for it..
well expressed
Loved this peice
Wonderful Alok and well said.
nice one!!
"her distance beyond my reach; by mere design
awkward indeed.."
the infibte gap or the virtual space, ironically defines the us-do-ku of human emotions...
why don u title ur scribblez??
wonderful! I always love how you end poems.
Pria: oh! yes u r right :) thank u
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Zofo [the hermit of wandering thoughts]: the best part is wht u said in the second comment ... it just gives me some peace of mind .. take care and thank u
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Keshi: thank u
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Andrew: I am replying to both ur comments .. thank u so much for those words .. means a lot
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Jeevan: like vodak :) what say :) thank u as always
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Deepa: thank u for the understanding .. greatly appreciated
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Janice: Wonderful from you counts so much ... Many thanks my friend
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Saptashi [der Bergwind ]: thank u for ur words and thoughts ... I had replied to the question of why don't I title my post any longer in one of ur earlier comment ... well not titling the pieces firstly helps me save time from thinking a suitable topic everytime ... and secondly it frees the reader's mind from any prejudice as to what the writer is / was thinking and let them read the piece from their perspective
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Thank u guys
Greatly appreciated
Alok
"lest her shyness succeed
hidden from treasures I see
she turns helpless
her distance beyond my reach"
u r bringing whatever u r imagining in ur mind... & ur words r flowing in such a way dat we can understand it... superb Alok...
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