Wednesday, November 28, 2007

It was around three in the noon, I remember
distinctly ... quite a few stammers coming forth,
on an otherwise hot sultry afternoon
the office seemed astoundingly cold.

I couldn’t understand the lingo, even her grammar
seemed fractured beyond my recognition;
but she kept murmuring from a patch of dark coloured
urban monument sans the natural conscience.

A frown that seemed alien to my continent sneered
with wry punctuation to my very predicament;
no she never intended to inveigle and come to my doorstep
teasing every moment with her unrecorded address.

If I resisted her calling it would surely have been a sacrilege
I followed its path, yet mindful of boasting my intelligence
under the sky that seemed so relentless, .... I stood
there with my open arms; …. but it wasn’t exactly raining yesterday.

12 comments:

kalai said...

wow...superb. before reading the last para, i thought that u r talking abot a girl. But after completing it, i realized that u r talking abot rain. fantastic.... nice comparison....

Keshi said...

very poetic!

Keshi.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

the ending is perfect!

Anonymous said...

Hi, not able to understand fully..It wil take 2 - 3 shots to understand it..
Anyways, take care
Mona

annie said...

Ahh i thot that was abt a mysterious gal..

gP said...

unbelievable, what metaphor. I got lost as well...maybe romantics impressions girls all the time :p
very nice bro.

Alok said...

Kalai: Thank you :)

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Keshi: thank you

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Andrew: Thanx for ur words

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Mona: Thanks for tht effort ...

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Annie: it indeed was or wasn't it :) thank u

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Siva [Ghost Particle]: :P :P :P ... must have rubbed off. thank u ...


Alok

Janice Thomson said...

'teasing every moment with her unrecorded address.' - I just loved this line Alok!
And the last verse - oh yes the last verse was so so perfect.
Excellent my friend.

aria said...

Opens like a flower, with a gloriously unexpected center. (wasn't thinking about the rain either) Lovely.

Jeevan said...

Beautiful poem it was. I love the movement you felt there.

Alok said...

Janice: thank u my friend

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Aria: that is a lovely thing to say ... I was suspecting u were not well ... hope u r better now ... thank u

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Jeevan thank u for ur encouragement


Alok

annie said...

Reference to Keshi's post -Life after Love..Saw ur comment there. Thanks for understandin my bit and puttin it there in ur refined words. Thats exactly what i have been tryin to ppl like her but they dont understand the situation properly. U did it. thnx