It was around three in the noon, I remember
distinctly ... quite a few stammers coming forth,
on an otherwise hot sultry afternoon
the office seemed astoundingly cold.
I couldn’t understand the lingo, even her grammar
seemed fractured beyond my recognition;
but she kept murmuring from a patch of dark coloured
urban monument sans the natural conscience.
A frown that seemed alien to my continent sneered
with wry punctuation to my very predicament;
no she never intended to inveigle and come to my doorstep
teasing every moment with her unrecorded address.
If I resisted her calling it would surely have been a sacrilege
I followed its path, yet mindful of boasting my intelligence
under the sky that seemed so relentless, .... I stood
there with my open arms; …. but it wasn’t exactly raining yesterday.
12 comments:
wow...superb. before reading the last para, i thought that u r talking abot a girl. But after completing it, i realized that u r talking abot rain. fantastic.... nice comparison....
very poetic!
Keshi.
the ending is perfect!
Hi, not able to understand fully..It wil take 2 - 3 shots to understand it..
Anyways, take care
Mona
Ahh i thot that was abt a mysterious gal..
unbelievable, what metaphor. I got lost as well...maybe romantics impressions girls all the time :p
very nice bro.
Kalai: Thank you :)
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Keshi: thank you
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Andrew: Thanx for ur words
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Mona: Thanks for tht effort ...
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Annie: it indeed was or wasn't it :) thank u
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Siva [Ghost Particle]: :P :P :P ... must have rubbed off. thank u ...
Alok
'teasing every moment with her unrecorded address.' - I just loved this line Alok!
And the last verse - oh yes the last verse was so so perfect.
Excellent my friend.
Opens like a flower, with a gloriously unexpected center. (wasn't thinking about the rain either) Lovely.
Beautiful poem it was. I love the movement you felt there.
Janice: thank u my friend
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Aria: that is a lovely thing to say ... I was suspecting u were not well ... hope u r better now ... thank u
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Jeevan thank u for ur encouragement
Alok
Reference to Keshi's post -Life after Love..Saw ur comment there. Thanks for understandin my bit and puttin it there in ur refined words. Thats exactly what i have been tryin to ppl like her but they dont understand the situation properly. U did it. thnx
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