I could almost sense, your
scent wafting through my room ...
In strive to slake my thirst
of noon, I sauntered through
unsuspected silence of the gloom.
I am almost always benumbed
of sensations and your touch ......
I summoned once to your presence
in my ever lasting naivety …..
a thousand roses .... with thorns.
The broken rainbow of milky opal
yearns for coeval pearly moonlit night ....
As I look out of my window today,
alas! I realise, unlike the red gold of a
sunstone, I always .... had failed to shine.
29 comments:
Wow Alok...such poignancy. The last lines are really touching. I love the haunting imagery in this too. Excellent write.
this made me feel young (well almost) and sad
well done
Lovely and intense. You gotta strong hold on vocab. How how?? I get intimidated by some of the words in your posts feelin that am such a dud. Or am i not the only one to feel so....i hope so.Anycase good grasp on words.
first time on yr blog and those poems have really made a place :)
sharad
GREAT:)
alas! I realise, unlike the red gold of a
sunstone, I always .... had failed to shine
Wow... its amazing....
I agree with Janice and Floots.... there is a sadness and regret, but a beauty hidden inside. I think it wonderful writing.
I love the ending.
A beautiful write though, there are some sadness. Well written. :)
Beautiful words flowing here...
a thousand roses .... with thorns. It was beautiful with feel! nice.
First time here... very nice... i loved what I read.. hope to be a regular!!
whoa!!
you do really amazing poetry!!
im somewhat overwhelmed..
thanks 4 ur comment on my poem..
again, real glad u visited my blog.. i get to read ur poems then..
tc.
the last lines really tugged at my heart...
and i agree with annie, your words sometimes intimidate me. :)
Excellent diction, this poem is very striking.
HOPE YOUA ARE WELL!
This is so beautiful and pleasure to read and reread.
You have poetry down to a fine art, Alok.
Best wishes
Annie
I want to say, this is my favorite (so far) but the moment I'll read your next post, I'll have to re-consider coz you keep writing such amazing verses one after the other..
Loved the last para .. in fact loved the first psrs too .. ok.. loved(and related to) everything about it ..
I did enjoy your potic wind ...falling on us
Nasra
You very well play with your words Alok and beautiful.
Everyone's said everything i had to say.... I am speechless !
Beautifully written Alok...as usual :)
** I realise, unlike the red gold of a
sunstone, I always .... had failed to shine.
but tell me sweet Alok, who doesnt fail to shine? We all shine only for a while and for a reason...we cant be shining forever...can we?
Keshi.
Keshi, If stars can shine forever so do we girl;)
you are the epitome of poetic emotion! wow....loved the roses n thorn part as well as the ending! like many of your fans mention, your vocab is mind-boggling!! whew~!
Nimmy :)
Priya but we r not stars r we? :) I mean we humans havent got an element called 'forever' in our lives...we may shine, but only for a while. wut say girl?
Keshi.
lovely words...I like the ease and the poignance with which you have crafted the words...they are simply beautiful even though the atmosphere may be heavy...Very nice!
woow !! what a blog ...
well written... :)
Janice, thank you so much ....
floots, my thanks
annie, don't mean to intimidate .. thank you :)
Sharad, thank you, u urself write wonderfully
Kaylee, thanks girl, I am fine, you take care ..
Kalai, thank you so much
Inside our hands, outside our hearts, thank you mam
Andrew, thank you sir
Venus, thank you so much
Rakesh, welcome and thanks man ...
Jeevan, thanks buddy
Alien, welcome and thank you buddy, really hope to see u regularly
Time keeper, thank you for reading
Gulnaz, thank you ... i didnt mean to intimidate :)
Manimala, thanks man
Annie Wicking thanks you so much for your kind words
Aria coming that from you means a lot ... heartfelt thanks
Nasra, thank you so much
Priya, thanks a lot
Ronak, thank you buddy
Keshi, hey u called me "sweet Alok" ...:) as to ur point .... u are correct, we can never shine always, everyone of us know, but then expectations kills us, it is this expectation from ur loved ones (its not that they dont understand but still they wish) that burdens us .... it is these expectations (sometimes unachievable) that always remains unfulfilled :) Thanks a ton for tht lovely comment
Priya, I will leave Keshi to answer that since u specifically asked her :) (and she has already answered) :) (hey btw thanx)
Nimmy, thank you so much for such kind words, alok
Keshi, Keshi I will leave Priya to answer that as u said "wut say girl" :) and tytu
Kalyan, thank you so much for ur kind words
Deepak, Welcome and thanks man
and this is sadly haunting.., love can never be lost. if you loved, so be it.
let it be, let it be, let it be.
always.
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