Thursday, August 16, 2007

Breaking free ...

I
Unrestricted winds blew carelessly
unbarred, over his frivolous illusions,
demanding no space, giving none
ever so unaware, though he wanted some.

His eyes looked far, somewhere
for sustenance of his life, - solemn and wide
he looked on, beyond those visible nights.

II
Amidst carved clay of human conscience
diaphanous senses passed his perceptions,
clothed in black aura, he couldn't but realise
the impalpable irony of their evident mind.

Intellectual affections were always
far and between, a search unbothered
for someone had been there, before him.

Un-ornamenting allures of intonations, drew
him ever so precisely without intention,
draped in dusty chambers were sown
mollusk fossils of all his insinuations.

III
He had always lamented, ever more so now,
at structures that gave shapes, are now dying
for definitions that were always in place.

The felony of facts he had always thought
were imbibed in theology craving for naught,
his search was never edifying rationality
for in every reason’s structure, was a sense of morbidity.

In the far crevices of his brain, lurking somewhere
was the dark, welcomed always as unspecified, unhindered rains,
by barren lands turned into graves, by the sun’s unrelenting rage.

He shrugged his attired wishes, casually as ever
for he had always known, he had to accept it someday,
the reprehensible corners of his imaginations, will never
yearn for form, which will always remain, abstracted.

29 comments:

gP said...

you write too well bro!

//his search was never edifying rationality
for in every reason’s structure, was a sense of morbidity.//

true to say...all reasoning breaks down in the face of truth because we are not sure what is real and what is true.

I have the second part of the story up now. Enjoy!

Annie Wicking said...

How perfectly wonderful..!

Best wishes

Annie

Toriz said...

:)

Anonymous said...

u ok?

laughingwolf said...

very heartfelt, nicely done....

Nitwit said...

Dreams often dont come true, so what keep dreaming
Apirations often dont fulfill, dont stop aspiring
Just remember, winning is just an event, being a winner is a spirit

Cheers!!
Nitin

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wonderful writing! thanks

Jeevan said...

Could see a great writer here. very nice. some new words learned buddy:)

mystic rose said...

wow!!

i have to read this again. :)

Janice Thomson said...

'the irreprehensible corners of his imaginations, will never
yearn for form, which will always remain, abstracted.'..I love this line Alok as it speaks of the feelings of a true artist that lives within all of us. Many don't get the connection to life/truth and art that you have portrayed here so well. Excellent writing.

Ps; you don't need the 'ir' in front of reprehensible :)

Alok said...

Siva (Ghosty) thanx buddy ... I was completely bowled over by both the part of ur story ....

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Annie, my thanks to u

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tori, thanks for reading, ty buddy

alok

Alok said...

Kaylee, I am fine, thanks for asking .... u r back to ur place is amazing comfort to me, tc

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Tony (laughing wolf), thank u so much .... really glad u liked it

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nitin (Nitwit), tanx so much dude, appreciated both the comment and wht u said on chat:)

alok

Alok said...

Andrew sir, thank u so much for ur appreciation

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Jeevan thanx buddy, thanks for reading

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Mystic, thanx so much for tht lovely comment

alok

Alok said...

Janice, thanx so much mam ... i shld have given it more thght .... i have changed (removed) the "ir" ... i understood wht u meant, that change has given it the exact meaning as it shld hv been ...

thank u for pointing that out ...

alok

KAYLEE said...

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW THANK YOU:)

KAYLEE said...

whats up eith ya?

KAYLEE said...

with not eith

KAYLEE said...

i wanna tlk to ya haha!

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

Hey! I like the new photo! :)

Alok said...

Kaylee ... nothing much ... lemme check if u r online ...

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Andrew :)

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tc

alok

Sandy said...

Beautiful poem bro

Uday said...

i m not a poet. but this one apeals me

KAYLEE said...

how are ya?

gulnaz said...

wonderful and i loved the metaphor of clothes, i think it works very well. brilliant really!!!

Alok said...

Sandy, thanx buddy!!

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Uday, neither am i, these r more of scribbles than a poem!!!, thk u for reading:)

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Kaylee, me fine, thanx buddy

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Gulnaz, it seems u were reading here, when i was reading ur ....


ty for liking it!!! really glad

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hope u all r having a wonderful weekend

tc

alok

KAYLEE said...

i am not they are worried about my lungs now:(

Anonymous said...

lovely words...you have crafted the sub-human mind and its thoughts beautifully!

Have a nice Sunday mate...!

aria said...

"The felony of facts he had always thought
were imbibed in theology craving for naught"

Loved that line. Can relate to most of them, actually.

Alok said...

Kaylee, use the link that i sent, hope it helps, tc

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Kalyan, thanx bro, appreciated..

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Aria,ty, thnx for reading!!!

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thnx guys

alok