Thursday, September 6, 2007

The first fall ....

We used to pretend
on every pretense ….
used to … of usual suspects ….
Through the wicker rocker roads
traveled … balanced ….
svelte miles ….
Before long …. we fell …
we fell badly along,
When realization of clouds
struck thunder benign
dignified silence preceded aligned,
In the driblet of feel …
enticed ... we held our breath
proceeded further …. a step a time,
Now waiting …..
oh! so long ….
unbearable silence
annihilating mind ….
No pretext required non so pretense
Lets shout once
Let it resonate
Let it hear ...
beyond those hills that lay …
at every corner around
Let it echo …..
Let it echo ….
with our solemn vows ...
harmonised today ...

25 comments:

Priya said...

That is was I will call as "freedom" or "be yourself". If you can let go of many things from your mind, its empty and you do not have to renounce and feel bad. Just like illusion, it exists in a corner. Its good to drop off the weight from mind or heart and be happy for one day shouting from the top of the hill.

mystic rose said...

..
with our solemn vows ...
harmonised today ...


beautiful!! and passionate indeed.

gP said...

in a cyclic existence, the nuances of life tells stories, as you have reflected here. but life goes on. beautiful.

KAYLEE said...

GREAT I AM BACK!!!!!!!!!:P

Janice Thomson said...

Beautiful Alok...you describe the joys and pains of life with passion and feelings few writers are capable of creating.

kalai said...

Alok,

Well said... Though others dont know whether we are pretending or acting truly, our mind knows everything.

Pretending is our first fall...

Am i right Alok?....

laughingwolf said...

does this mean the happy event is today? great, if so :)

Anonymous said...

wow!!!beautiful words..
Life is just like that..but you have to face it nicely and smiling...

Thanks for your lovely comment..

Can i ask you one thing, how can you remember all thse non-regular words and used it so perfectly in poems...

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wonderful !!

Anonymous said...

so intence ..powerful

Nasra

floots said...

power and passion indeed
well done

Inside our hands, outside our hearts said...

Very nice Alok, I agree, sounds of freedom from all things that we hide away so they do not get tainted.

Annie Wicking said...

Wow, lost for words, You have said it all.

Wonderful, Alok

Jeevan said...

You used the words well to express your experience in the fall beyond nature.

Keshi said...

profound Alok!

Keshi.

venuss66 said...

Beautiful! You expressed everything well with your choices of words. Very powerful.

Anonymous said...

HAVE FAINTED THREE TIMES THIA WEEK:( hows u?

Anonymous said...

good poetry sir...

Neha Nair said...

thats fab!

annie said...

What grandiloquence! nice..

After ur explanation understood The Jurist..thnx!

Jyoti said...

wonderful !

Neer said...

pretense... a truth! non-pretense... very difficult! beautiful image, alok! and hey thank you for swinging by

aria said...

a different one .. good thing is.. no one can slot you .. you offer such vivid expressions ..

Anonymous said...

lovely words...I can feel every word making an echo...so beautifully & intensely described!
Simply beautiful!

Alok said...

Priya, .... yes I felt like shouting from the top of my terrace that day :) thank u buddy

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Mystic Rose, thanks a lot :)

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Siva [Ghost Particle] yes life goes on :) thank you buddy

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Kaylee, ... gr8 but I read ur recent post and it saddened me ... u shldnt think like tht

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Janice, .... thank you so much for those fantastic words

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Kalai, yes u r right, nothing goes beyond our mind ... thank you

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Tony [laughing wolf], yes exactly 3 yrs :) thank u

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Mona, thank u ... @ non-regular words :), I really dunno the answer but thank u so much for ur words :)

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Andrew, thank u so much ...

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Nasra, thank u mam

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Floots, thank u ... in ur words cheers :)

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Inside our hands, outside our hearts, .... thank u so much for ur thoughts

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Annie Wicking, thank u so much for those lovely words

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Jeevan, thank u my frnd

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Keshi, thnx buddy

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venus, thank u mam

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Ashu, thank u so much ... but just a question, why thanks ??? :)

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Neha, thanx buddy

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Annie, thank u frnd

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Jyoti, thanx a lot

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Neers, thank u

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Aria, @ different & slotting :) thank u

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Kalyan, thanks for tht lovely comment

Thank u guys

alok