strange sensations of the fingertips
stalks dark recesses of hidden caverns
traces stealthy movements
breathes flowing pulses,
stops -
holds -
caresses the bare neck
slowly -
slow steps -
step by step,
fulfillment ...
painlessness …
sheer pain ….
the ruby pendant worn-down
on the empty wrinkled bed sheet;
spurious stains of evening skies
standing alone on busy broadways.
34 comments:
nice.. :) esp the last two lines..
If I think in romantic mood, its aboslutely brilliant.
very sensual -- (I also agree with aria.)
Sensual and mushy :)
Nice, sense different.
Love those last lines in this very sensuous piece. Well done Alok.
ooooooumph! is someone trying of being adult here ;p
Those last four lines could inspire a RoYds post Alok!!! :-D
this piece almost tore me appart...!
didn't percieve it from the normal romantic mindset....
love the last 2 lines!
Keshi.
somehow, somehow...this reminds me of a beautiful evening, when the rain just stopped... :)
Alok - we seem to often visit each other's blog at the same time! I saw your comment right after I came here to see if you had a new poem. :)
(Bu the way, yes, my senryu has a sadness to it and it was on purpose.)
Aria: Thanks a lot ...
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Priya: thnx for ur encouragement
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Andrew: thanx. And as to ur last comment, I just sometimes feel I read too much between the lines, thts why I said, "it must be just me" :) thanx for checking on me even when I hardly write ..
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Jeevs: thanks a lot
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Jeevan: Thanks buddy
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Janice: My thanks to you as always :)
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Jyoti: I am quite old u know :) thanx a lot
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Miladysa: Ahh! such a wonderful thing to say :) thank you
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Casper: I am glad u could see this with a different eye ... I couldn't have expected more ... thanks a lot
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Keshi: Thanks a lot
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Siva: Beautiful pictures u draw... thank u
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Thank you everyone for ur time
Alok
been awhile ..but its nice to be back ambracing your words
You write such beautiful poetry, Alok.
Wonderful!
Best wishes
Annie
Simply beautiful. Hope you are doing fine and enjoying your work. Take care. God Bless.
now what could be this holding in its bosom bright...
hmmmm
no updates..its been more than a week.
Is everything ok there??
Nasra: I am so glad to see you here .. Thanks for dropping by
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Annie: Thanks to you too for dropping by .. and for ur kind words
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Mary: Thanks a lot my dear friend ... I am doing fine .. thanks
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Adi: Thanks for dropping by .. I read all ur comments .. truly appreciated .. many thanks
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Jyoti: Thanks for checking on me ... Nothing much to write .. no inspiration.. no thoughts .. nothing much ... I seem to be living in vaccum lately and I need my atmosphere back :) Life otherwise is fine ... Thanks again
Alok
oh! the same situation is prevailing there too :)
well I would like to have your comments on www.kalakariyan.blogspot.com too
visit whenever you have time
Intense Alok, I love when you bring out your emotions and show them to us. It does our eyes and hearts good. Romantic indeed.
soft love.
T
for now - you have been tagged!
ps: have u 'risen' in love of late? 'fallen' wud have been ironic! don mind my asking
hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
you are fantastic!!!
a kiss for you, my dear friend!
god bless u dear
can we exchange our link
r u ready to do?
don't u think its been a while?
I miss your work!
where r ya?
Keshi.
?
Jyoti: You atleast had one post :) thanks a lot mate
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Tara: lovely thing to say .. honoured .. thank you
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Saptarshi: thanks .. will give it a try later on
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Rohit: thanks. You have my links right ... so no point in exchanging :)
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Casper: Thanks mate .... I will try and scribble something this weekend .. thanks again
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Andrew: Coming from you, I am honoured beyond words ... felt very good .. thanks a lot
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Keshi: I am here .. right here :) thnx matey
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Adi: :)
Thanks everyone. You guys are the greatest
Alok
I had forgotten just how delicious this poem is Alok - yummy :-D
Miladysa: the comment was so delicious too :) thanks so much
Alok
Alok,
I am here looking for your words. I love reading what is here, but they only leave me wanting more.
Where are you?
Soft love,
T
interesting!!
Tara: Thanks a lot for checking on me. It indeed has been sometime that I had written something on this blog. Constraints of time has been one of the reasons, but then it is a fact that there was hardly anything to write. Thanks again
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Shooting star: Thank you and welcome.
Thank you everyone for pulling me back from my sleep. It indeed had been long since I posted something. Had it been not for u guys this blog would have been long dead. Thanks again
Alok
i'm much impressed by the use of alliterative sounds here... reinforcing the imagery...
/s/ creates that stealthy mood
and
/p/,/b/,/d/ relate to pulses...
stop... go... step by step
just beauuutiful...
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