Tapered in paints
brushed …
with colours in vain;
Was it conceited …..
I hardly thought so
colours of red… no violet
no it was pink,
or just ……
scions of scintillated preen;
Tacit understanding
on the realms ......
of silhouetted dreams,
phantoms of confluence
it was indeed …..
of greater sheen;
Aberrant enigma ….
let me borrow, for a while …..
if not more,
a piece of your skin
embedded deep ….
to let me feel ....
your fingerprints.
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A good piece of writing. I will be happy if u explain it coz I feel drifted.
Hey Priya thanx and sorry at the same time .....
I will try and explain what I thought while writing the piece and hope u will not consider me a nerd after reading it ....
The piece is about a lover who is mesmerized by the beauty of his beloved. He wants to hold her hands which lay beside him on his bed and looks distantly at her fingers and wishes that he could hold them forever.
He tries to explain the beauty of the fingers which are like slender candles glowing and spreading light in the otherwise dimly lit room. Her finger nails are polished but he does not care more for the beauty that he feels requires no artificial attainment. He is so blindfolded by the beauty that he does not even recognize the colours for they mean nothing to him. They make them look conceited and so he would prefer them without the colours on her nails. To the lover her fingers are descendents of sparks of his love which is so clean, pure and pristine.
He goes into a trance as he continues to look at her fingers, hoping, wishing and desiring of his future with her. The pointed nails all culminating together resembling his desire (or lets call it his dream) of their being together. There is an unsaid understanding that requires no words. They are like phantoms of a stream flowing together to a common destination. To him they are path of a glorious dream.
He now looks at her face and finds it abstractly different and beautiful. To him she is more of an enigma than a person. So beautiful is she that he goes on to term her beauty an aberration to the word itself. He secretly desires and now garners enough courage to ask her whether she will lend her hand so that he can hold it tight and let him feel her skin to feel his own. For without her touch his life will be a waste.
...... my abstract imagination
alok
good job i am a little better today and you?
went to the Er last night though!!!!!!!
"guys it's the start of another weekend fun. this week has actually flown past me. Never realised the journey from Mon - Fri. I just hope all weeks were like this.
enjoy your weekend with beers or champaign! your choice. take care ......."
I agree but i must not at my age do the alcohol!
It has nice imagery and is very descriptive. It just flowed. Have a great weekend.
This is nice, I especially like the line, "Aberrant enigma ….
let me borrow, for a while …..
if not more,
a piece of your skin
embedded deep ….
to let me feel ....
your fingerprints"
There is something quite personal about this. I enjoy you. thank you for writing.
very nice work!
lovely words, & your explanation even better!
another good one, bro...
have a great weekend
btw - i now have your place linked from mine :)
That was a beautiful explanation. My brain didn't work enuf to understand thou'.
Thank you Alok.
feel like i've had a cerebral manicure :)
cheers
hey whats up?
I love your way with words. Keep at it! :)
scions of scintillated preen
nice one here,
brought forth a chuckle it did..
cheers
z
HOW ARE YOU TODAY ALOk?
you sleeping in read mty blog sometime today???
Nice writing lol.
That was some heady cocktail of imagery and sentiment .. which made 'love' seem deliciously savory ..
liked your 'explanation' too .. should be wonderful - being loved like that.
Priya, thanx .... glad u liked the description ...
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Kaylee, read ur post ... m so glad to see u feel relaxed n happy n btw yes u r not supposed to have alcohol now .... girl just wait for ur turn ... it will come
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mani, "It has nice imagery and is very descriptive" .... thanx man ....
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inside our hands outside our hearts ... thanx buddy ... "There is something quite personal about this. I enjoy you. thank you for writing" ........ feels honoured mate and over the moon ... thanx again
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andrew sir ..... appreciated ... thanx
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Kalyan .... "...& your explanation even better" ty man!
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laughing wolf ... "i now have your place linked from mine" thanx bro ... really appreciated for ur gesture ...
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floots ... "feel like i've had a cerebral manicure" ..... how abt a spa after that .... buddy that's damn relaxing believe me .... thanx mate
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irene .... thanx mam! "I love your way with words" .... really appreciated. ty
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zofo, "brought forth a chuckle it did"..there is nothing like a smile .... glad u liked it .. thanx buddy
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sandy, "Nice writing lol" ..... thanx buddy
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aria, thanx mate ..... "love seem deliciously savory .." indeed it is ... "should be wonderful - being loved like that" it is aria and sometimes it doesn't matter how
ty
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thanx everybody
really appreciated
take care
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